Term 3 writing workshop

The workshop I chose was exploring sound with Mrs Wilburn my group wrote this:

I was slurping a water melon when I hit a crunchy pip.

I was crunching away enjoying my water melon when  gulp I  Swallowed
a couple of seeds.

Slurp I was sucking the juice from the water melons.

Pit I spat some pips onto a metal wall it made a ding sound.